Paroxysm Effect

At points in this poem, you do have some very strong imagery, but it's too perfect. It's too idyllic and like cadmium said, something needs to happen. Whoever this speaker ...

Just a short piece. My first prose in a long time. - - - “You want to know something, kid?” Gregory slurred, a scanty giggle working its way into his ...

I love the sort of tone that this has to it, in color and feeling. The brown/tawny tinges to it give it an antique-y feel. I'm not the biggest fan ...

You have some very strong imagery here in this piece, but there were a few spots where I stumbled. My first issue is that I could use a bit more ...